TOPIK Intermediate Essay Writing Guide (한국어능력시험 중급 쓰기 가이드)

In the first post in TOPIK Essay Writing Series, we looked at how the evaluation system of TOPIK essay section works. Then in the next post, we analysed the evaluation and marking of three beginner level model essays which were written by three different students.
Today we have 3 sample INTERMEDIATE level (중급) essays and we will see how they are evaluated and marked by examiners. I would seriously advise you to go through these older posts before you proceed further : TOPIK Essay Writing Guide and TOPIK Essay Writing Guide-  Beginner.
Below we have 3 TOPIK Intermediate level sample essays and the complete break-up of their evaluation and marking. Analyze the evaluation charts properly and try to find why one essay got more marks than the other two. I hope it will help you make your TOPIK essay better and get a better score. All the best.
Here is the essay question from Intermediate level of TOPIK:

※ [45] 다음을 읽고 400~600자로 글을 쓰십시오. (30점)
45. 여러분은 어떤 집에서 살고 싶습니까? 그 이유는 무엇입니까? ‘내가 살고 싶은 집’이라는 제목으로 글을 쓰십시오. 단, 아래에 제시한 내용이 모두 포함되어야 합니다.

살고 싶은 집은 어떤 집인가?
왜 그런 집에서 살고 싶은가?

And below is the first model essay (Click on the images to enlarge):

Next is the second model essay and it’s marking break-up:

TOPIK Intermediate Model Essay 2

And here is the third and last model essay: 

TOPIK Intermediate Model Essay 3

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